Pre Production: First draft feedback

I received my first feedback on my script draft today. I only handed in 30 pages but thought it would be enough to give Simon a rough idea on my writing. Simon's feedback was really helpful and gave me a lot to think about. This is what he came back with:

• He doesn't feel that I have reached the 'problem' within my story yet.
• There a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes that can be easily rectified but will lose me marks if I don't.
• Formatting needs to be sorted out.
• I need to be clearer on how Raddish is seen, at the moment it isn't clear that only Andy and us as the audience can see him.
• Some scenes I have set very well and detailed but some have no details at all.
• I have sometimes overwritten, silence is sometimes more powerful.

I will continue writing and amending my script with all this in mind.